2018年11月11日托福独立写作范文

11月11日托福独立写作题目：政府没有好好教育人们意识健康饮食的重要性？

Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?

Government is not doing enough work to educate people the importance of nutrition and healthy eating.

托福独立写作范文：

【立场：Agree】

Introduction：不宜太长，信息推进要快，要在句话就切入主题。

An individual’s dietary choice and dining timetable matter to the person’s physical wellness and general wellbeing. As the choice is made, it may be made by the individual alone or under the government’s guidance. In most cases, the choice is personal and probably irresponsible, and the authority does notintervene adequately.

For starters, there are two reasons that may be no brainers. Frist, few public service ads about healthful eating are seen. 【措辞技巧：不在动词处否定；文脉技巧：段落中心句短小，当道理已经到了底层的时候，就直接“例证”】 For example, seldom do people find enough ads that promote healthy eating, when they walk in the streets, turn on the TV or unfold a newspaper. 【措辞技巧：两个句子都是“否定前置”，突出否定意】 【论证技巧：正说反说】Instead, they are bombarded with countless commercials of junk food, such as chips, biscuits, and instant noodles. 【论证技巧：当一个道理已经讲到位的时候，不要硬凑篇幅】 Second, the subject that teach humans’ nutritional need is absent in the public schools’ curriculum. 【措辞技巧：不在动词处否定，而是选用了有否定含义的形容词】 Since the curriculum is designed by the government, the absence should be attributed to the government’s negligence.

There is another reason that may be controversial. Our government fails to legallyinform our fellow citizens of the need for proper eating. The reality is that most countries do not have laws that tell the citizens to eat properly. 【论证技巧：类比论证，建立prior knowledge为参照物】However, just as smoking can be outlawed, having a nutritious and balanced diet can be legally required. Some would oppose this idea for the reason that the law would be a nanny-state legislation that interferes with people’s lifestyle choice. Nevertheless, when citizens are unconscious of their unhealthy diet or knowingly irresponsible in eating, why do we question the legitimacy of the administration’s intent to prohibit of a lifestyle that incurs medical bills that are too massive to be redeemed? 【措辞技巧：反问句】

In conclusion, government is not doing its job adequately in educating people the importance of nutrition and healthful eating. It【it的虚指】would be enough, if government did enough publicity about healthy eating, incorporated the knowledge about nutrition into the school curriculum, or mandated a healthy diet.