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2019年5月23日雅思大作文题目：为何青少年犯罪越来越多？怎样惩罚他们?In many parts of the world children and teenagers are committing more crimes,what are the causes? How should these young criminals be punished?

解析&审题

本题涉及犯罪，重复的是2014年8月2日的考题，先要求考生分析原因，然后提出解决办法。

犯罪话题在雅思考试中出现比较频繁，大家应该给予重视。近年来雅思考试中的“犯罪”话题主要集中在犯罪的原因，如何减少犯罪，惩罚罪犯的方法等。

2013/11/9, 2015/4/25, 2017/5/6 ：Young people who commit serious crimes, such as a robbery or a violent attack should be punished in the same way as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree? （犯重罪的青年是否得到与成年人一样的惩罚？）

2014/11/8：Some think most crime is the result of circumstances e.g. poverty and other social problems. Other believe that most crime is caused by people who are bad by nature. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.（犯罪是由于环境所致，还是天性所致？）

2015/8/8, 2018/7/28: Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later. Some people think that they are the best people to talk to school students the danger of committing a crime. Do you agree or disagree? (改造后的犯人是教育孩子的人选吗？）

2018/3/3：In many countries, prison is the most common solution to the problem of crime. However, another effective way is to provide people with higher education so that they can not become criminals. To what extent do you agree or disagree? （关于犯罪问题，监狱和教育哪个更有效？

2018/11/3：It is shown that many criminals have a low level of education. Some people argue that the best way to reduce crime is to educate criminals in prison to help them find jobs when they leave prison. To what extent do you agree or disagree? （减少犯罪的方式是提高教育水平吗？

年轻人犯罪越来越多，原因何在？这里应结合当代社会给年轻人造成的影响来分析。比如，贫富差距的增大，单亲家庭的增多，吸毒者越来越等，这些无疑都会导致年轻人犯罪率的提高。至于解决办法，无非是教育改造和监狱两种方法，可以认为应该结合这两种办法，或者取一种立场，认为教育比监狱更有效。

老师笔记

01

Many countries are currently witnessing a rising criminal activity among people under the age of 18. There may be three reasons for this case, and the methods to punish children and teenagers should focus more on rehabilitation than prison.

许多国家目前都出现了18岁以下人口犯罪活动的增加。这种情况可能有三个原因，惩罚儿童和青少年的方法应该是更多关注的是教化而不是监狱。

解析

（1）本段引出话题，明确即将分析三个原因，并提出自己关于如何惩罚青少年罪犯的观点。

（2）Currently 目前

（3）Witness 见证；目睹

（4）Rehabilitation 恢复；教化

02

Firstly, poverty could turn an immature child into a criminal. As the gap between the poor and the rich widens, young people may start looking for wrong ways to bridge the gap when they find their friends are richer. Secondly, with the number of broken families going up, more and more neglected children have trouble with the law, as the lack of love and affection from the family makes them angry and violent. As a result, their negative energy might find an outlet in committing crimes of all types. Finally, not only taking drugs is itself a crime but it may also lead to various other crimes that young people never intended to commit in the first place.

首先，贫困会把一个不成熟的孩子变成罪犯。随着贫富差距的增大，当年轻人发现他们的朋友更富有时，就可能会开始寻找错误的方法来弥补这一差距。第二，随着破碎家庭数量的增加，越来越多的被忽视的孩子触犯法律，因为缺乏家庭的爱和感情使他们很愤怒、很暴力。因此，他们的消极精力可能会在各种犯罪中找到出路。最后，吸毒本身不仅是一种犯罪，而且还可能导致各种年轻人本来并没有打算犯的其他罪行。

解析

（1）Immature 不成熟的

（2）Turn..into...将......变成......

（3）The gap between the poor and the rich 贫富差距

（4）Bridge the gap 弥补差距

（5）To have trouble with the law 触犯法律

（6）Find an outlet in...在......找到出口

（7）In the first place 首先；一开始

03

How should society punish young lawbreakers in order to prevent or reduce their criminal activity? On the one hand, severe punishment like locking up children in adult jails could have a deterrence effect by discouraging young criminals from committing new crimes. On the other hand, harsh punishments may have a negative impact on young offenders if they are incarcerated in the same way as adults. This could weaken young criminals’ already fragile links with society, nourish their negative interpersonal networking, and increase their likelihood of future criminal activity. Therefore, rehabilitation is probably a better answer than prison because it provides an environment that is more conductive to education.

社会应如何惩罚年轻的违法者，以防止或减少他们的犯罪活动？一方面，严厉的惩罚，如将孩子关进成人监狱，可以阻止他们犯下新的罪行，从而产生威慑作用。另一方面，如果青少年罪犯与成年人一样被监禁，严厉的惩罚可能会对他们产生负面影响。这可能削弱青少年罪犯与社会本已脆弱的联系，滋养他们消极的人际网络，增加他们今后犯罪活动的可能性。因此，教化可能是一个比监狱更好的答案，因为它提供了一个更有利于教育的环境。

解析

（1）lock up 关起来

（2）Deterrence effect 威慑效果

（3）Incarcerate 关押

（4）Fragile 脆弱的

（5）Nourish 滋养

（6）Interpersonal networking 人际网络

（7）Likelihood 可能性

（8）Be conductive to... 对......有益的

7分范文

Many countries are currently witnessing a rising criminal activity among people under the age of 18. There may be three reasons for this case, and the methods to punish children and teenagers should focus more on rehabilitation than prison.

Firstly, poverty could turn an immature child into a criminal. As the gap between the poor and the rich widens, young people may start looking for wrong ways to bridge the gap when they find their friends are richer. Secondly, with the number of broken families going up, more and more neglected children have trouble with the law, as the lack of love and affection from the family makes them angry and violent. As a result, their negative energy might find an outlet in committing crimes of all types. Finally, not only taking drugs is itself a crime but it may also lead to various other crimes that young people never intended to commit in the first place.

How should society punish young lawbreakers in order to prevent or reduce their criminal activity? On the one hand, severe punishment like locking up children in adult jails could have a deterrence effect by discouraging young criminals from committing new crimes. On the other hand, harsh punishments may have a negative impact on young offenders if they are incarcerated in the same way as adults. This could weaken young criminals’ already fragile links with society, nourish their negative interpersonal networking, and increase their likelihood of future criminal activity. Therefore, rehabilitation is probably a better answer than prison because it provides an environment that is more conductive to education.

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建议背诵的句子

1. As the gap between the poor and the rich widens, young people may start looking for wrong ways to bridge the gap when they find their friends are richer.

随着贫富差距的增大，当年轻人发现他们的朋友更富有时，就可能会开始寻找错误的方法来弥补这一差距。

2. Finally, not only taking drugs is itself a crime but it may also lead to various other crimes that young people never intended to commit in the first place.

最后，吸毒本身不仅是一种犯罪，而且还可能导致各种年轻人本来并没有打算犯的其他罪行。

3. On the one hand, severe punishment like locking up children in adult jails could have a deterrence effect by discouraging young criminals from committing new crimes.

一方面，严厉的惩罚，如将孩子关进成人监狱，可以阻止他们犯下新的罪行，从而产生威慑作用。

4. Therefore, rehabilitation is probably a better answer than prison because it provides an environment that is more conductive to education.

因此，教化可能是一个比监狱更好的答案，因为它提供了一个更有利于教育的环境。